Kia ora Bloggers,
In the past week we have being learning to write scary stories with a buddy.What me an my buddy ruby had to do was think of some scary stories that could be real or fake.I found it challenging to try and think of a story that is spooky.I enjoyed writing the scary stories.Next time I would change up the story.Hope you enjoy reading the spooky stories Have fun...
It was a normal stormy dark night and the wind is whistling.Queenie is a tall teenger with amazing dlonde hair and the most dreamy blue eyes.When you look in her eyes you get lost in her dreamy eyes.
Queenie lives alone in a dark forest.She was asleep dreaming of her day tomorrow. since it is stormy she heard a big bang on her window but she didn't bother to get up she look to see what it was because she thought it was just a big brunch hitting the window.She got sick of the banging on the window so she got up and went outside to see if anyone was there but it was just a brunch so she moved it to the side.
Kia ora Zara!
ReplyDeleteIt’s Charlotte here from the SLJ team!
Awesome story here, Zara! You’re right, it is challenging to think of some spooky story ideas, but you have thought of a good one! You include some awesome adjectives like ‘dreamy’, ‘amazing’, and ‘tall’.
You build up the spooky tension in your story by saying that Queenie heard a big bang on the window. Perhaps a way to build up that tension even more will be to describe how she was feeling when she was walking outside? Was she trembling? Was she feeling brave but still a bit scared?
Thank goodness it was just a branch on the window and nothing spooky!
You said that you would change up the story next time. How would you change it?
Just letting you know that the SLJ has started today and there’s an activity waiting for you!
I’m looking forward to seeing all of your learning this summer :)
Ngā mihi,
Charlotte